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When in dreams we first awaken
From the chances rarely taken,
When we find we are mistaken
And we lack a place to run,
When in time we find despairing
An emotion not worth sharing,
When denied the warmth of caring,
Is it true we are undone?

I am no crying child inside,
I am no fool who fights the tide.
My dreams have met no early death,
I feel no pressure to my breath.

Raise me higher, in your mind.
I swear to you in time you'll find
That placed upon your pedestal,
As it must be, someday I'll fall.

If at first we are succeeded,
If 'begin' finds us defeated,
When we doubt that we are needed,
Is that really pain?
When we cross a love that strangles
Like a vine of many tangles,
Is that not a lust that mangles?
Love that's like a chain?

I am no blunted ivory charm,
I am no paige to false alarm.
My many wells have yet to dry,
I hold no secret wish to die.

Here between the moon and stars,
Your adulation knows no bars.
But I've a secret, with this crown:
There's nowhere left to go but down.

If, by turns, you're dour and manic,
When existence makes you panic,
If your passion's inorganic,
Then this is how we part.
If my piece is tough to follow,
If my words are ringing hollow,
Know that you've been hard to swallow.
You doomed us at the start.

How high you raised me! That my faults
Were blended out like melting salts!
When will you see me as I can?
Not a god, but just a man.
©2004-2009 ~eightofhearts
:iconeightofhearts:

Author's Comments

Fought tooth and nail to bring this bastich to birth. Had some help along the way too.:heart:
It meanders pretty heavily along what it actually means, but the rhyme scheme bit hard and wouldn't unlock her jaws.

Maybe a better description later, when I gather my thoughts on exactly what I meant to portray.

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:iconvagadeathrose:
very wonderful RinnyRinRinMuffin <3 *snugglies*

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love all my Muffins <3
:iconalex-kun:
beautiful.another fav for you,my friend!
:icontica103:
ooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhh.......... ..just wuvly!!!!
:icongangres:
Makes me so envious .. such beautriful literary technique .. somethign that i wish i could od but just dont have the capacity .. keep up the great work!

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God damn alot of badwords in thie Motherfuck!
:iconunholy-eden:
Oh... My... God... That is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever heard... you are a genius... I dun even see anything for you to improve on... It's shearly brilliant... a cement mixer full of kudos to you!!!!!!

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".................." ~Zephyr
:iconeightofhearts:
:heart: sanku for teh help!

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Come all Without,
Come all Within.
You'll not see nothing,
Like the mighty Rin.
:iconeightofhearts:
Thank you. ^^ Favorites from a writer of your talent is a high praise indeed!

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Come all Without,
Come all Within.
You'll not see nothing,
Like the mighty Rin.
:iconeightofhearts:
:glomp: D'awww, sanku!:heart:

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Come all Without,
Come all Within.
You'll not see nothing,
Like the mighty Rin.
:iconvagadeathrose:
chu be welcome ^.n_n.^

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love all my Muffins <3

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